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The Shower [Apr. 25th, 2006|12:06 am]
Lucid Loquacity
"Where am I?" he thought, as he could feel the water falling on his naked knelt body. The hot water began to gradually lose its intensity. Across the bathroom, he could see a mirror. To his dismay, the fog had consumed his vision.

A greater panic engulfed his thought.

"Who am I?"

Into his calloused hands he gazed. In a mere moment of contemplation, all he could see was the warm lucid liquid running through his fingers.

In the next moment, his cognition indirectly produced a feeling of pure horror.

He remembered.

[User Picture]From: escapingrome
2006-07-17 12:26 am (UTC)
The language is very nice, ends up being quite atmospheric. Some phrase are esp. nice ("lucid liquid" for example, is nice alliteration), but it comes off as a little pedantic in places. The phrase "...his cognition indirectly produced" basically means "he felt horrifed". On the whole though, it's pretty good word choice!
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